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Dalton1
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 Posted - 04 Jan 2010 : 16:39:27
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Dimming Mid Night Candles
By Yero Jallow, US
Mid night candles on the blaze at night wee-hours
Fires of love, but no ebony angel – her the queen
After that love separation by her –the angelic queen
Now, loneliness has visited during mid night hours
Dimming his mid night candles low down, low
Leaving him with dreadful thoughts ashore
The fault of which was never his’ at all, the blues
To the west side, no little prince Harry of Wales
And to the east side, no princess Diana of beauty fame
Loneliness has wrecked fancy loose and wild
Wilting all the flowers and roots that ever bore
So he held onto a little prayer to thy Lord –the God
The hopes of re-uniting once again with her –the queen
The adorable Prince and the angelic princess of Wales
Like the joyous days of mid night candles at top gloom
At once, to share the joys of its lightening gloom
The teething white laughter of true love, aloud
The smiling vessels of love unseen in thunder echoes
For the vows they once shared in matrimony
And the scents of lily flowers they smelt together
Over the age of their couple-hood, now at shatter bond
Causing unending wounds on his heart, with cuts
The trauma of which unhealed, lives forever –oozing!
With the continuous dimming of mid night candles
Fires of love but no ebony angel -her the queen
To the west side, no little prince Harry of Wales
And to the east side, no princess Diana of beauty fame.
The poem above, “Dimming Mid night Candles” is thoughtfully a love poem reflecting a household going through marital sours. The main characters: the queen being the wife, the prince being the son(s) of the family, the princess being the daughter(s), and the main character taking the pronoun “he” the husband. In their life long togetherness, their relation soured to where the only option for them due to their problems would be separation. Once they separated, the husband had long nights of loneliness by not seeing his family around him, and truly long for that day when he will re-unite with them again. The poem is imaginarily written, freely.
yj
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"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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Edited by - Dalton1 on 04 Jan 2010 20:59:41 |
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Sister Omega
United Kingdom
2085 Posts |
Posted - 04 Jan 2010 : 19:11:00
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Dalton was your poem inspired by Elton John's "Candle in the wind"? Original dedicated to the memory of Marilyn Monroe and then rededicated for Princess Diana at her funeral in 1997.
"And it seemed to me that you lived your life like a candle in the wind
Never knowing who to cling to
until the rain set
Oh I would of liked to know you
But I was just a kid
Your candle burnt out long ago
But your legend never did!"
Dalton did you mean to say "Wales" as in the country which Prince Charles title or "Whales" as in mammals who live in the sea? Homophones can be tricky in English language.
If the word "whales" is deliberate, how does it tie up with the concept ashore?
I just felt that your poem needs a bit more clarity for Readers to understand this metaphor.
Peace
Sister Omega |
Peace
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Edited by - Sister Omega on 04 Jan 2010 19:13:54 |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 04 Jan 2010 : 20:28:57
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Hi Omega,
I must apologize for my typos not intended. I extend my apologies to the British Royals as well..& I don't intend to equate them with "whales" in the sea as my error, but meant "Wales" as the home for the Royals. I will submit a rectification right away. I thank you for bringing it to my attention.
Though, I never read the poem you forwarded, but I would look at it later, & thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year!
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"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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Sister Omega
United Kingdom
2085 Posts |
Posted - 04 Jan 2010 : 23:11:45
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Happy New Year Dalton, Wales is one of the four member Constituent Countries of the Unitied Kingdom comprisng of England, Scotland, Wales,and Northern Ireland. Traditionally is the first in line of the thrown who takes the title Prince of Wales. He is also the Dutchee of Cornwall.
The song I thought you may have been inspired by was written by Elton John a famous Singer. pianoist and song writer in the west for many years.
Here is the remix of the original version of Candle in the wind http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mtshchIocIY followed by the remake of it for Princess Diana's funeral. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zIJIBo9bJk0
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Edited by - Sister Omega on 04 Jan 2010 23:31:35 |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 05 Jan 2010 : 01:49:03
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Omega,
Truly, a great poem you shared from Elton. I totally agree with the bashing that Diana is fittingly the 'Enland's rose' and was a 'candle in the wind' without doubt.
RIP Lady D…& till again.
Once again, I thank you for coming to my rectification.
yj
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Goodbye England's rose
May you ever grow in our hearts
You were the grace that placed itself
Where lives were torn apart
You called out to our country
And you whispered to those in pain
Now you belong to heaven
And the stars spell out your name
And it seems to me you lived your life
Like a candle in the wind
Never fading with the sunset
When the rain set in
And your footsteps will always fall you
Along England's greenest hills
Your candle's burned out long before
Your legend never will
Loveliness we've lost
These empty days without your smile
This torch we'll always carry
For our nation's golden child
And even though we try
The truth brings us to tears
All our words cannot express
The joy you brought us through the years
And it seems to me you lived your life
Like a candle in the wind
Never fading with the sunset
When the rain set in
And your footsteps will always fall you
Along England's greenest hills
Your candle's burned out long before
Your legend never will
Goodbye England's rose
May you ever grow in our hearts
You were the grace that placed itself
Where lives were torn apart
Goodbye England's rose
From a country lost without your soul
Who'll miss the wings of your compassion
More than you'll ever know
And it seems to me you lived your life
Like a candle in the wind
Never fading with the sunset
When the rain set in
And you footsteps will always fall you
Along England's greenest hills
Your candle's burned out long before
Your legend never will
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