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kaanibaa
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 Posted - 30 Jun 2011 : 23:58:20
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Dawda the crude sends a rustic hail
To all those who sail
By his home without fail
Even the snail
Crawling by his nail
Gets touched by the tail
The wilderness is an abode
Wherein dwell the wild hord
Ramblers come there to flee discord
For there they get free accord
To peace and tranquility as afford
To ramble with none to record
Nice to be aboard
With nothing to uphold
The rambler in the wilderness
Casts aspersions with no tenderness
As there is no one to caress
He seeks for a subject to harness
To his empty address
A dribbling press
Of idle gossip meant to harvest
Ends in a blazing forest
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
1169 Posts |
Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 00:01:38
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T1020 this is it a silly write up which qualifies for the bin but ends up here before i could cancel ! men this is not poetry but rambling ........ please do not praise this one . |
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toubab1020
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Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 01:00:55
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Kaan,please do not think of me as a poetry critic I am not in that mode,the comments that I (A simple soul you understand  ) have made have been genuine that they evoke a feeling of what I think you wish to convey in your writings,these will differ from person to person,it is unfortunate that others have not had the inclination to post comments on your writings,instead preferring to follow the never ending circle of political clap trap,generated by one party or another or one personality or another and offering the electorate of the Gambia any hope by way of promises in changes of policies that they would introduce if elected,anyway all that is nothing at all to do with me as I am not a citizen of Gambia, I am not a politician,I am not a scholar.
Your last work I understood and thought the third verse was the best.
Relax in the wilderness and relax for a while zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz |
"Simple is good" & I strongly dislike politics. You cannot defend the indefensible.
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Santanfara
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Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 17:52:35
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| Kaani, your poems are very well thought out. real gent you are. Keep it up. |
Surah- Ar-Rum 30-22
"And among His signs is the creation of heavens and the earth, and the difference of your languages and colours. verily, in that are indeed signs for men of sound knowledge." Qu'ran
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toubab1020
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Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 18:37:19
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Santa, pleased that you have arrived here and posted,and read all the posts I presume  |
"Simple is good" & I strongly dislike politics. You cannot defend the indefensible.
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
1169 Posts |
Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 20:18:54
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| thanks for the comments any way. different people are differently inclined and they follow those inclinations even here online. lets allow them to run free to where ever or which subject makes them buzz and thus relax in their comfort zones. |
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Momodou
Denmark
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Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 21:01:07
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| Your poetry is always very much appreciated. I hope you are storing all of them for a book someday. Keep it up.! |
A clear conscience fears no accusation - proverb from Sierra Leone |
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toubab1020
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Posted - 01 Jul 2011 : 21:15:50
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"buzz and thus relax in their comfort zones." I think that you have found yours Kaan  |
"Simple is good" & I strongly dislike politics. You cannot defend the indefensible.
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
1169 Posts |
Posted - 02 Jul 2011 : 12:55:18
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| Thanks Momodou and all comments appreciated and I still did not store these postings may need help from you Moms will be in touch later |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 09 Jul 2011 : 18:11:02
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Yeppe, yeppe!
Thanks!
Congrats for all these poetry lines. It certainly brightens one's day.
Kind regards with love,
Yero |
"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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Karamba
United Kingdom
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Posted - 09 Jul 2011 : 23:29:59
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| Kaanibaa, another spicy dish. |
Karamba |
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
1169 Posts |
Posted - 10 Jul 2011 : 01:12:40
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| kaani bu saf sap la kuko touch ham linga touch lii moye degga! wollof says degga kaani la! |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 10 Jul 2011 : 02:05:51
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quote:
Originally posted by Karamba
Kaanibaa, another spicy dish.
ollof yee nyu neh, kani buu diighah, saf nah looool.
Greetings bro Karamba! Good to see your powerful lines. It is great to see your (all) consistent defiance.
Thanks,
Yero.
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"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
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Posted - 10 Jul 2011 : 13:47:46
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"Simple soul you understand
Has a clever hand
Which marks all with a brand
Toubab is part of that clan
Where we all get touched by his gentle hand
But being a simple soul we understand
That he is not be treated out of hand"
Cheers T1020 have a peaceful sunday , if you do drink am sure it is with moderation , I can only visualize you as a person on very firm ground ; sober of thought and sound of mind . How else could you withstand those crude assaults you face on this bantaba if these qualities were not your true attributes. I just want to say keep it up on this free ground let no one cow you into silence and oblivion, but can any body do that ? I think not so see you around buddy!
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
1169 Posts |
Posted - 10 Jul 2011 : 14:23:08
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Originally posted by Karamba
Kaanibaa, another spicy dish.
Karamba kantaslimanka
Futa Touba
Karamokobaa Toubaa
Njiko baykang leh karambaa!
Biring duniyaa
For laa kirraa
Kaani tofoo buka daa janny
Barry ning meng ya tayyi
Hanny eemaa domo fang
Eanya kaa jeeyoh bondi leh
Tonyaa for hanny wo kuyataa doolu yeh
Tonya lebeh labang na
Hanna seh minning minning
Tafal tafally
Nyii neh be labang na
Yeah maama! |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 10 Jul 2011 : 17:49:06
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Eeyoh! enjeh kontan kontan. Toubab keh london, sankeng na-kola suum suum maagh. Meetei kaneh ohh bagh sembai kaamagh.
Enjeh mang mang shekai keh jamataw (kuu jolak). Kuu fulak dii mani ngaag oh letah senom shekai. 
Eyoh, safoh saf....hula keh foni, balah baseng.
Yero |
"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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