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MADIBA
United Kingdom
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 Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 14:07:47
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THE SLEEP
Almost naked safe for a strip of cloth
That covered my front
What for I know not
Lying on my back
Wheeled by the white
Ushered into a room
Filled by the greens
Room unusual
Not the one I lived in
This room knows no
Drink, no food, no music
All it knows is dead silence
Like the silence of the dead
Lying there
Waiting to be forced
Into sleep
Yes a sleep
But not like all sleep
I may never wake up
Silently I pray to Allah
To save me from the abyss I am about
To drift into
For what seemed like eternity
Slowly I drifted to sleep
A sleep from which perchance
Will never wake up
Many have gone to sleep
Never to wake up
Resurrected I looked around
Trying hard to connect the dots
All I see are white robes
Angels truly they are
Kind, industrious, soft
Dedicated to duty they are
They all smiled at me
The smile of love
The smile of victory
Joy filled my heart
I smiled
Alas I’ve made it!
©MADIBA 2009
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toubab1020
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Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 16:05:45
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| I think that you wrote this poem from person experience,I hope everything is still going well,I would say this poem is "enlightning" others may not associate what you are conveying but many will. |
"Simple is good" & I strongly dislike politics. You cannot defend the indefensible.
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MADIBA
United Kingdom
1275 Posts |
Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 17:14:32
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2bab,
I appreciate your input. I keenly await commentaries from the members, literary minds like kaani, dalton1, kayjatta et al, before weighing in. |
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toubab1020
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Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 17:39:04
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Originally posted by MADIBA
2bab,
I appreciate your input. I keenly await commentaries from the members, literary minds like kaani, dalton1, kayjatta et al, before weighing in.
Ah yes...........Great minds don't always think alike  |
"Simple is good" & I strongly dislike politics. You cannot defend the indefensible.
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anna
Netherlands
730 Posts |
Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 18:22:26
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Thoughts of an operation theatre come to mind (the green outfits of the doctors) where nurses (in their white outfits) are preparing a patient (you?) for an operation, making him go to sleep (sedation, narcosis). When the operation fails, you will not wake up. But this patient woke up, seeing the whiteclad 'angels' (nurses), who are smiling reassuringly and victoriously. Another successful operation!
Why would anyone say 'Alas - i made it'?
I hope you are well! |
When an old African dies, it is as if a whole library has burnt down.
Amadou Hampate Ba (Mali) |
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kaanibaa
United Kingdom
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Posted - 03 Jul 2009 : 20:57:26
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| I second Anna's position and I cannot add anything to what she wrote. I hope we are correct Madis. That was a very nice poem foe me. |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 04 Jul 2009 : 12:05:10
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Bro Madis,
I wish you a faster recovery from that hospital treatment you went through recently. I think that the poem is cracked beyond doubt by the commentaries before me. Poems like these are personal...that is the author is talking about what seemingly was considered a "corpse" in an ICE, but who through faith revived from that visit from the second world, back to write his taste of it -only to mean he is alive and survived being touched by the cold hands of death. Obviously, it was painful, but heh Madis...you are telling us this story...means not this one, and I pray you are spared many times by such life encounters.
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"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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MADIBA
United Kingdom
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Posted - 04 Jul 2009 : 15:28:01
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Anna and co you are all spot on and thanks for the well wishes. I had to undergo a surgery some six months ago. It was a surgery i needed yet it was frightening. My fear reached its peak when a member of the surgery team came and asked me to sign a consent form. I nearly left the hospital at that moment but i looked around and saw my wife, tears welled into my eyes and she gave that powerful feminine nod of approval and i had to muster courage not to let her down. So i signed that piece of paper that to me was an indemnity document to save the doctors if anything went wrong. If that was the last psychological torment i was wrong, because i was asked to strip to the bones and offered a dress that looked like a woman's. I was taken to the theatre and the anesthetic doctor said to me bluntly that he was going to put me to sleep. Sleep indeed i did. But why do i have to sleep for a treatment? My mind started wondering around and stories of people who died on the ops table started flooding in. And like someone about to face the executioner i said my last prayers in my Islamic way. It was serious business.
Later i woke up and saw myself somewhere else with a different set of people as my mind was about to go blank again i saw and recognized my darling wife. The waiting nurses in their whites smiled as if to say welcome to heaven or welcome back to earth.
Science has done a lot of good and continues to do a lot of good God bless the doctors and their selfless assistants around the world. |
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anna
Netherlands
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Posted - 04 Jul 2009 : 16:26:16
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Madiba, thank you for your very frank answer. I truly hope that by now you have recovered completely!
Signing the 'consent document' must have been frightening, but to tell you the truth i wouldn't care at all if i would have to dress like a man in order to get my health back. Why bother about having to strip and put on a woman's dress and to be put to sleep (would you rather stay awake, feel the pain and see all the bloody things they are going to do to your body???).
I'm sure these doctors and nurses see half naked sick people day in and day out. Why feel embarrassed ? Just as long as you will be cured! |
When an old African dies, it is as if a whole library has burnt down.
Amadou Hampate Ba (Mali) |
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kayjatta
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Posted - 06 Jul 2009 : 08:06:18
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Madis I am glad you have made through the operation. Thanks Anna for cracking the code. I am envious that I didn't share in this achievement, I have been away over the weekend. Also great job Kaaniba, Dalton and Toubab ...
Madis you didn't have to worry about the 'consent form'; it doesn't free the doctors/surgeons of any liability for negligence. It is just a formality, but hey thank God in Professor, Dr. Jammeh's "Presidential Treatments" there are no 'consent forms' and there are no doctor/patient confidentiality. You are first paraded on GRTS (TV) and if anything goes wrong during the treatment, good luck you are on your own. Oh I guess you could be arrested also for maliciously not following the president's instructions which basically comes down to 'lying to the president' or they call it "giving false information to a government official" .... Enough for the humor!
Stay well Madis, and my best regards to you and your family. |
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MADIBA
United Kingdom
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Posted - 06 Jul 2009 : 12:17:55
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Thank you Kay, Anna and everyone out there. Yes i am fully recovered and much better person now.
Kay honestly, i can't still fathom why Jammeh's patients are paraded on TV for their treatment. It breaks all rules of confidentiality in treatment. Even the herbalist in my village would take you into his hut for consultation and treatment |
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Dalton1
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Posted - 06 Jul 2009 : 22:13:06
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Also great job Kaaniba, Dalton
Bro Kay,
Thank you as well. The author shared about sleep, that is a temporal visit to the underworld. It was not a fun piece to read... well, well..now that he is the narrator, that is just the 'cool-aid' in the piece.
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"There is no god but Allah (SWT); and Muhammad (SAW)is His last messenger." shahadah. Fear & Worship Allah (SWT) Alone! (:
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